Talkback Flashcards
(22 cards)
2nd line in play
Well. Um. Let’s … take a break. Just to clear our heads . Collect our thoughts sort of thing. and the come back.
We’ve been her four hours already
I know, I appreciate, we appreciate it, because it’s new, and we needed to hear the words the words. All of those words from our esteemed play write. We know it can be different to hear read aloud than, you know, in our head. So let’s take a quick break and then chat about…all those words
I don’t get it
Just take a quick break and then come back
No. The play. I don’t get it
Oh, um…maybe during the break we consider ways to ask our play write questions in the form of..a question
Like I don’t mean to be rude and all. And I get it’s new draft. But I just don’t get it
Right, well that’s why we’re here, to have this read and talkback
Like I get what was happening and all, you know, the whole plot thing but I guess…
You don’t get it
Take the main character
Yeah
His names Hamlet
Yeah
And the dead fathers name is also Hamlet
Yes
They both have the same name
Yes
Did you not have a title?
If we can just take a break
May I say something
Christ, Richard, please. By the way, wonderful job
And I’m sure you crushed plenty quill and blotter for scratch this all out, but you have too much speaking and not enough doing
Everyone, please, will is a seasoned writer. He has the queens ear and the kings men. He knows how to take feedback. We’re all on the same side here
If it was me, I’d take act 5 and make that your new act 1. Then we get the whole sword fight first, grabs the audience right away
But that wouldn’t make sense
And my part. Ophelia
Yes?
Should be much bigger
Alright, everyone, let’s take a break. I’ll write down some leading questions to guide the conversation around the areas which needs attention
What if I kill him in the new act 1
Look, let’s respect that our friend and colleague here has been working on this piece for some time. Maybe we talk back to him on Things in the play that really stood out to up. That made a positive impact George? What are you doing?
Crossing out stage directions
That’s will’s first addition
Exeunt? I mean do I really exit?
No, you’ve just been stabbed with poison
Look, I hate talking about myself but I’ve always thought o my inner being as this constant reenactment of the silent struggle in the society where certain people aren’t aloud to contribute in meaningful ways
Okay?
I mean is this even really a play?
ENOUGH!… now look… you’ve all been very kind to provide your time and talent to reading this. And I get this is raw reaction, but really! Let’s focus on being constructive and not destructive. Alright? I mean it’s not like we’re sitting her criticizing you
Thomas exits
That went rather well, don’t you think
